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  1. Its actually very scare that if somebody challange a religion you choose to have none of it and labeling your opinion as holier then thou and other ones as racist or unjust only adds motivation to real racism.
  2. Hi, why not just remove comments that are racist or criminal instead of just locking down the thread?
  3. I read your memoirs of a Slovak and I really enjoyed it, best story on the forum (Well, that I have seen) by a clear mile. The outside of Football stuff is just as good and welcomed into the story as the match details and I look forward to the second chapter (Assuming you have the patience and desire to keep it going anyway.)

    Good stuff Kris.
  4. do you read World Soccer
  5. hey.....i havent been on in a while, someone pissed all over my old computer....anyways....was wondering if u have a link for your database you made for the scottish league!!!! was good from what i member....any ways...cheers
  6. Been through the entire first chapter of Memoirs now, and I really enjoyed it. You created a very nice backstory throughout the early sections of the chapter and continued to build upon this even in the latter stages of the season, rather than just focusing on the results aspect.

    I didn't really like the dream (nightmare?) sequence though, as I felt it was a bit 'over the top', given the fact that the story is primarily centred around a football focus, however apart from that I don't really have any criticisms. Obviously there are some grammar mistakes in there, but even published authors have people who iron out those little niggles in their writing, so that's not really a big deal.

    Although I will say that during the part where Sirk was alone with his assistant, it seemed that you were heading towards a paragraph of erotic writing.

    To sum up, I think it was a great read and I'm going to continue following it when you begin the second chapter.
  7. Have to say, your accent is awesome.
  8. I'm looking forward to the next installment.
  9. Alright man, I've had a read of your story on here and its pretty good mate. As a student of English I am impressed haha.

    You've got a good imagination, and like Bill said below you're good at setting the scene and bringing in other aspects to your story rather than just football to make it a lot more interesting than some of the stories around here.

    Looking forward to chapter 2, you should definitely continue it.
  10. Just read through page 1 and 2, and I'm very impressed. You set up a nice backstory before the football updates started coming, which I think helps the readers (myself included) relate to the main character in the story.

    I like the detail you go into as well, such as when you name exactly what car you're driving, and that your new apartment is still full of boxes. Little details like that set the scene rather nicely.

    I'll keep following this one I think. It's definitely different from all the others out there, and it's inspiring me to finally do my own FM story.

    Nice one Kris.
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